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Tears--A Haiku

by Frank Fields
copyright 08-19-2008


Age Rating: 7 +
Tears--A Haiku
Picture Credits: http://www.art.com


for travelers, everywhere


Night's misty sadness
Lonely strangers passing by
Soft hands feel the dew


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        02-04-2013     Rachel Brown        

I love this Haiku Frank.
Its beautiful and expresses well the atmosphere
at the time when this was
written. It is so beautiful.

-Rachel ^_^

        11-08-2009     Frank Fields        

Certainly there are balances in our lives. Some seen, perhaps. Other not so easily seen, again perhaps. It's always a pleasure to know that a reader took a work (any work, really) and found enough value in that work, to enrich not only his own life, but also that of the writer's, by letting him/her know. ^^

Thank you! ^_^

Frank :)

        11-07-2009     Alan Reed        

I like the write so much. I feel as though I have been there. The dew makes the hands and the heart even softer. Loneliness makes the heart that much stronger and harder. Great metaphors and a special style that places the reader within the setting. Thank you. -Alan

        03-31-2009     Frank Fields        

Now for the Haiku and picture.
Any haiku must be based on facts (correct me if I am wrong).

Wrong.

Look at the picture sunset or sunrise?
Fine to say misty(dark cloudy) and one can also expect that night is about to take over.

Reader's choice

Logically this is not the time for Max (Day) or Min (night) temperature.

Logic and poetry aren't necessarily companions

So kindly enlighten me the dew factor.

Metaphor, poetic license, etc.
What the reader is not willing to accept as poetic value, the poet cannot enlighten


This world is a circus; a buffoon in a balancing act is better than the one falling of the tight rope. (Hands off) A joker has its own charm.
and I love jokers perform to say 'I choose to start a fight' and I alone have the right to stop it'.

True enough, for you, perhaps. All walk their own path and beat their own drum. This "fight," however, stops here and now--by MY choice!

My am is not to lower any ones image but to accept something that is wrong is also bad.

And who is the arbiter of wrong or right? Or bad or good? And who is asking anyone to accept anything? If it troubles, leave it.

True Don't comment if you don't like something; I shall remember that in future.

Good. At least one lesson learned, then.


Sorry but had to reply to your comments.just this once;Will not reply to any comments in future.

"Had to"? By whose command?

I have offered naught but wisdom and patience as so many other respected voices with intelligence and talent have told me. You continue to return simplistic arguments and a fanatical arrogance that insults.

Any additional responses which you "have to" make will be hidden from at least my sight. Guaranteed!




        03-31-2009     Jai Garg        

Frank,

It is a joy to learn something about haiku 5-7-5 style. Lol we have this type of competitions in local language where poets reply extempore to each other.( I donít prefer that and I only write in English so donít learn the art).

I am sure you would have heard the name of ĎMirza Galibí; his couplets I believe are the best. In India most of the complex styles are used in songs laced with music.
Success only comes to those which the tongue loves to recite or murmur.

Once I was a believer of separate picture and separate poem put together.

What changed me was when I told a person Holland that our food was the best.
He had replied all your stuff tastes of spices and fat; turning potatoes to cauliflower and vice versa. Quite true, I realized when he said boil a potato strip it to smell and enjoy the real flavor.

The real truth in picture prompt write: It is ones choice to make the cart first and then put the horse or design the cart as per the driving animal.



Now for the Haiku and picture.
Any haiku must be based on facts (correct me if I am wrong).

Look at the picture sunset or sunrise?
Fine to say misty(dark cloudy) and one can also expect that night is about to take over.

Logically this is not the time for Max (Day) or Min (night) temperature.

So kindly enlighten me the dew factor.

This world is a circus; a buffoon in a balancing act is better than the one falling of the tight rope. (Hands off) A joker has its own charm.
and I love jokers perform to say 'I choose to start a fight' and I alone have the right to stop it'.

My am is not to lower any ones image but to accept something that is wrong is also bad.

True Don't comment if you don't like something; I shall remember that in future.
Sorry but had to reply to your comments.just this once;Will not reply to any comments in future.

        03-30-2009     Frank Fields        

Haiku is supposed to be short and precise, in an indirect way.

The traditional structure for Haiku is 3 lines. 1st line containing 5 syllables, 2nd line containing 7 syllables, 3rd line containing 5.

There are some variations. The general applications can be found in two of my articles under "Poetry Help." Some other respected writers, here, have also given their views on Haiku.

It is my belief that whenever anyone (writer, poet, critic, reviewer, casual reader, etc.) steps into the world of an artist--literary, visual, or otherwise--they will be much more benefited by losing any pre-conceived ideas they have and simply absorbing the artist's offering.

It was, after all, created for an audience to enjoy and appreciate. Usually. Sometimes a piece is simply created because the artist has seen a thing of beauty and value and tries to capture the essence of that vision. Ultimately, however, I think an artist wants to share his vision--as much as possible anyway.

Haiku, especially, demands that both the poet and reader enter into a partnership. It has a deceptively simple format which is very easy to misunderstand or to want to place in the "regular" world of poetic works. To do that is a terrible disservice to all three: the form, the poet and the reader.

An image is never intended to be an integral part of the writing. That is, they may complement each other, but each should be able to stand by itself. After all, these are two different art forms--the visual or graphic and the literary.

It will never be possible for a writer to display an image with a work that will meet everyone's interpretations of either, alone, or both, together. It is the reader's responsibility to honor the partnership by at least accepting that what the writer offered has meaning and value. The reader may not recognize the value a work has to an author, but if the reader isn't willing to attempt entrance into the author's world, sometimes it's better to withhold comment. Or, if comment must be made, to give comment without the awarding of any points, or, better, to ask the author by email to discuss the work with him/her.

Haiku has a quality, an essence which is, I think, more felt than anything else. All good poetry does that, but Haiku seems to open those doors so much better.

In this work I believed (and still believe) that the image captured an image, an essence of a peaceful, but lonely traveler, as he made his way through the evening on a nameless but important journey. Perhaps shedding a tear or two for his own reasons, but at least by brushing against the
leaves that are seen, which are dew-covered. No figure is seen in the image to reinforce the feeling of loneliness. Even the colors are subdued and quiet. The leaves are hanging down, also reinforcing the attitude of a lonely traveler. The small, white insect is drinking his evening fill, but is also alone. But does provide an interesting contrast of balanced from and color, with gentle dynamism.

The poem speaks for itself. In a different way, perhaps, to more than 160 readers to date, but still, with different interpretations based on their own perspectives, emotional character, expectations, etc. Those can never be removed, of course. But the partnership remains: the reader must be willing to suspend disbelief and attempt to see the vision offered. If that's impossible, for anyone, its better to leave the experience alone and not be troubled by it.

Thank you for your comments.

Frank :)

        03-30-2009     Jai Garg        

Frank I really don't know what haiku poem really needs.
Nor the relation of the picture to this write.

But,the words say a lot about the beauty of the misty night; relating to the person watching it.
Short and precise.

        08-22-2008     Anthony Lane Stahlhut        

This is very nice. I like the visions it creates in my mind! Thanks Anthony Stahlhut



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